[Solved] Cursed hounds introduction text

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[Solved] Cursed hounds introduction text

Postby ValadursErbe » Fri Jun 06, 2014 1:46 pm

The introduction text when meeting the cursed hounds reads really weird.

It should be more like this (warning, I am no native English speaker):

A few bright eyes are watching you, full of anger.
(the second sentence i can not understand)
Slowly, the source of the sound is revealed to you and an escape is impossible (rewrote this sentence a bit so it applies to a single and to a group of hounds).
All your valuables begin to glow, reflecting the greed of these demonic beings.
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Re: Cursed hounds introduction text

Postby Anubis » Fri Jun 06, 2014 10:15 pm

Two Adult Hounds and three Young Hounds?! Now you're just showing off! :lol: This text is on our to-do list, but either way your suggestion is well redacted. Just for fun, let's see if we can add a bit of style to it:

A few bright eyes are watching you, full of anger.
(the second sentence i can not understand)
Slowly, the source of the sound is revealed to you and an escape is impossible.
All your valuables begin to glow, reflecting the greed of these demonic beings.

Bright, unsettling eyes filled with hatred are now watching you.
Without warning a blood-curdling howl echoes through the obscurity, permeating it with occult forces.
Then, slowly, a beast-shaped figure reveals itself and you feel surrounded... unable to escape.
Your valuables are now glowing in the dark, seemingly reflecting the avarice of this demonic creature.
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Re: Cursed hounds introduction text

Postby ValadursErbe » Sat Jun 07, 2014 7:58 am

That sounds better than mine, I have to admit :)
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Re: Cursed hounds introduction text

Postby Menorbriam » Tue Jun 10, 2014 1:31 pm

Hi!
Those texts are fixed in the new version.
Thanks ValadursErbe
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