[SOLVED] Bestiary descriptions

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[SOLVED] Bestiary descriptions

Postby ValadursErbe » Wed Aug 06, 2014 3:42 pm

Archer (Human):
- behind the soldiers -> behind other soldiers (because the archers are already called soldiers in the first sentence)
- their enemies are subject to a constant barrage of arrows

Bard:
- erode the wills of their enemies -> erode the will of their enemies (there is no plural for will?)

Thief (the green one):
- follow a leader and are more organized

Venom Wasp:
- with each bite -> with each sting

Black Widow:
- they say they only -> they say that only

Dead Archer:
- who whose aim -> whose aim

Spectral Knight:
- not only are they are -> not only are they

Mummy:
- with all those they touch (is the "those" correct? i am not sure)
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