[SOLVED] Cursed Hounds (how would you fix it?)

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[SOLVED] Cursed Hounds (how would you fix it?)

Postby haldana » Fri Jun 27, 2014 2:38 am

Imagine you are working on the English translation. I have my thoughts but you may want to open it to others to put in their suggestions.
Currently when you meet them it says:

The Cursed Hounds I A few bright under dark eyes watch you full of anger. Suddenly a terrible blood-curdling screams you like will pronounce curses. Slowly, the creatures are shown to you and escape impossible. All valuables begin to glow, reflecting the greed of these demonic beings.

My suggestion:

The Cursed Hounds l Sinister penetrating eyes stalk you, full of rage. Suddenly a terrible blood-curdling scream {not "screams"} chills {permeates?} the air {your bones?} as curses pervade the charged ether. Slowly, from this nothingness, these demonic creatures emerge, escape impossible.

Do these Cursed Hounds have a chance to destroy or take any of your inventory? I have not noticed that, but admittedly did not look through my inventory after each meeting. Although I know none of the equipped stuff was taken. If they do not take or destroy anything, then I would change that last sentence also.

When you flee:

"Get flee the battle, thus circumventing certain death. The Cursed Hounds moves away in search of other victims. You feel safe, but you know you will find them again."

Okay. Trying to stay as close to the original intent as possible, I would advise:

"You flee from the battle, thus avoiding certain death. The Cursed Hounds move on in search of other travelers. You feel safe for the moment, but you know they will find you again."


This group is indeed terrifying and the occasional howling you hear while moving about is fun (does the frequency increase slowly as the odds become higher?). The recent nerf has made it somewhat more possible at higher levels in hard mode.
Because of this I think these panels could use some supernatural punch and awe than I have not been able to do. Thus looking for some input from the writers in the beta forum.
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Re: Cursed Hounds (how would you fix it?)

Postby Anubis » Fri Jul 04, 2014 10:06 pm

Greetings haldana, the Hounds cannot steal from the player's inventory however we wish to convey that they are greedy, envious beings for important lore-related reasons.

We are in the process of revising the texts related to the Cursed Hounds, and since an authentic vocabulary is important for immersion, we've incorporated bits and pieces taken from your suggestions. The new texts will be implemented into the game, in the near future.

Now back to content development, otherwise the Lords of Xulima will punish us for spending more time on polish than we spend on finishing the game :D

Thanks!
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